[med-svn] r5584 - trunk/community/papers/11_med-floss_luxemburg

[Michael Hanke]

Author: mih
Date: 2010-12-10 03:10:27 +0000 (Fri, 10 Dec 2010)
New Revision: 5584

Modified:
   trunk/community/papers/11_med-floss_luxemburg/paper-text.tex
Log:
Last bits for today.

Modified: trunk/community/papers/11_med-floss_luxemburg/paper-text.tex
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--- trunk/community/papers/11_med-floss_luxemburg/paper-text.tex	2010-12-10 03:02:34 UTC (rev 5583)
+++ trunk/community/papers/11_med-floss_luxemburg/paper-text.tex	2010-12-10 03:10:27 UTC (rev 5584)
@@ -508,17 +508,17 @@
 
 \subsubsection{Other fields than only biology}
 
-Looking at all the fork projects mentioned above (except Fedora
+Looking at all efforts mentioned above (except Fedora
 Medical and openSUSE Medical) it becomes evident that they are all
-dealing only with biological software.  Above it was stated that one
+limited to biological software.  Previously it was stated that one
 strong column of \DebianMed is this specific field and it is for a
 reason: The amount of free biological software is large and most of
-these projects are relatively easy to turn into packages - so the
+these projects are relatively easy to turn into packages -- therefore the
 amount of work per package is much smaller compared to for instance
 medical record applications with preparation of databases, dedicated
-user management, etc.
+user management.
 
-So there is one major difference between the projects mentioned above
+There is one major difference between the projects mentioned above
 and \DebianMed: While the biological part is really interesting for
 medical care \DebianMed tries to cover all other fields of medical
 care as well.  This goal is not yet reached but continuous work is
@@ -529,11 +529,11 @@
 An even more important difference than the more general approach
 compared to the other repositories is the fact that \DebianMed is not
 only about just packaging software.  The \DebianMed project is one of
-the earliest so called {\em Debian Pure Blends} and just wants to do
+the earliest so called {\em Debian Pure Blends} and aims to do
 more for the comfort of their users than adding binary packages to the
 Debian package pool.  The main goal is to turn Debian into the
 distribution of choice for people working in the field of medicine and
-to make Debian an operating system that is particularly well fit for
+to make Debian an operating system that is particularly well suited for
 the requirements for medical practice and research. The goal of
 \DebianMed is a complete system for all tasks in medical care which is
 build completely on free software.
@@ -550,16 +550,17 @@
 The strength of Debian is the huge number of developers (more than
 1000) all over the world working in different fields.  Some of them
 are working in the field of biology or medicine and thus have a
-natural interest in developing a rock solid system they can relay on
+natural interest in developing a rock solid system they can rely on
 for their own work (not only commercial interest to sell service per
-accident).  So sometimes the chances to realise specific support for
-small user groups are better inside a community driven distribution
-than in a commercial distribution: You just need some developers who
+accident).  Often, chances for providing support for
+small user groups are greater inside a community driven distribution
+than in a commercial distribution: it just needs some developers who
 have a specific interest and they will realise and publish an
 environment for their needs and will share it with other users.  A
 company that has to gain a certain market share is not flexible enough
 in this regard to cover very specific interests.
 
+% duplication
 The underlying principle that those things will be done if there is
 somebody who just does the work is called {\em Do-O-Cracy} -- which
 just means the doer decides what gets done.
@@ -569,14 +570,14 @@
 maintainers and so they added support for biological packages. The
 more the Debian user in the field of biology report back about
 problems or wishes the more Debian maintainers are able to enhance
-their system for their own and their users profit.
+their system for their own and their users benefit.
 
 \subsubsection{Metapackages}
 
 Debian offers many tens of thousands of packages. It is considered
 helpful for the users (who might not have the right to install
 packages himself) to specify all biomedical software with
-one single instruction - to the local shell or to the local system
+one single instruction -- to the local shell or to the local system
 administrator.
 
 \DebianMed contains a set of metapackages that
@@ -586,12 +587,12 @@
 and installs the metapackage of choice.
 The package management system will care for
 the installation of all packages that are in the list of dependencies
-of this metapackage - so the user can be sure that all packages he
+of this metapackage -- so the user can be sure that all packages he
 might need for the job will be installed on his system.  Once one of
 the metapackages is installed, a special user menu will be created to
 enhance usability for the user working in the field of medicine.
 
-Currently, inside \DebianMed applications are provided in certain
+Currently, \DebianMed applications are provided in certain
 categories: medical practice and patient management, medical research,
 hospital information systems, medical imaging, documentation,
 molecular biology and medical genetics and others.