[med-svn] r13147 - trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe

[Andreas Tille]

Author: tille
Date: 2013-03-06 14:21:24 +0000 (Wed, 06 Mar 2013)
New Revision: 13147

Modified:
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/debian-med-healthcafe.tex
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
Log:
There was some very helpful set of change suggestions provided by davidson.at.ling.ohio-state.edu and I'll incorporate these paragraph by paragraph.  Please expect several other changes this afternoon / evening.


Modified: trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/debian-med-healthcafe.tex
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--- trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/debian-med-healthcafe.tex	2013-03-06 13:26:43 UTC (rev 13146)
+++ trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/debian-med-healthcafe.tex	2013-03-06 14:21:24 UTC (rev 13147)
@@ -39,13 +39,13 @@
   \tolerance 1250%
   \emergencystretch 0.75em}
 
-\date{27. Februar 2013}
+\date{27. February 2013}
 
 \begin{document}
 % http://www.biostec.org/OSEHC.htm
 % --- Author Metadata here ---
 \title{\DebianMed \\
-       Integrated software environment for all medical purposes}
+       Integrated software environment for all medical applications}
 %%% Bug in style: \titlenote creates extra page :-(
 \author{Andreas Tille}
 %\email{tille at debian.org}

Modified: trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
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--- trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-06 13:26:43 UTC (rev 13146)
+++ trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-06 14:21:24 UTC (rev 13147)
@@ -1,19 +1,22 @@
 When people hear the term `\DebianMed' the first time there are usually
-two kind of misconceptions.  Sorting out these in the first place seems
-to be the best way to explain what it really is.
+two kinds of misconceptions.  Let us dispel these in advance, so as to
+clarify subsequent discussion of the project.
 
-People who know Debian well as a large distribution of Free Software
-usually consider Debian Med as some kind of customisation of Debian
-which is derived from Debian to serve some purpose in medical care.
-Astonishingly the idea that customisation can be done perfectly {\em
-inside} Debian is not well known and the technical term {\em Debian Pure
-Blend} seems to be hidden well enough in the Debian universe that most
-people have failed perfectly to understand the concept.  There are no
-separate repositories like PPAs or something like this -- a Debian Pure
-Blend (as the term pure implies) is Debian itself and if you have
-received Debian you have full \DebianMed included.  There are other
-Blends inside Debian like Debian Science, Debian Edu, Debian GIS and
-others.
+People familiar with Debian as a large distribution of Free Software
+usually imagine Debian Med to be some kind of customised derivative of
+Debian tailored for use in a medical environment.  Astonishingly, the
+idea that such customisation can be done entirely {\em within} Debian
+itself is not well known and the technical term {\em Debian Pure Blend}
+seems to be sufficiently unknown outside of the Debian milieu that many
+people fail to appreciate the concept correctly.  There are no separate
+repositories like Personal Package Archives (PPA) as introduced by
+Ubuntu for additional software not belonging to the official
+distribution or something like that -- a Debian Pure Blend (as the term
+'pure' implies) is Debian itself and if you have received Debian you
+have full \DebianMed at your disposal.  There are other Debian Pure
+Blends like Debian Science, Debian Edu (it creates the product
+SkoleLinux with some additions and install media delivered to schools),
+Debian GIS and others.
 
 The other misconception about the term `\DebianMed' comes from people
 working in health care.  They tend to assume that \DebianMed is some