[med-svn] r13161 - trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe

[Andreas Tille]

Author: tille
Date: 2013-03-09 08:36:53 +0000 (Sat, 09 Mar 2013)
New Revision: 13161

Modified:
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
Log:
Next paragraph according to changes by Wes Davidson


Modified: trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
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--- trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-09 07:57:35 UTC (rev 13160)
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@@ -37,19 +37,21 @@
 integrated health information system which is successfully running in
 several hospitals.
 
-After having clarified the misconceptions about \DebianMed we try to
+Having clarified the misconceptions about \DebianMed, let us now
 give a positive definition: \DebianMed is a pure subset of Debian that
-tries to integrate any existing Free Software that might be used in any
-of the several subfields of medical care.  In other words it is a Debian
+tries to integrate all existing Free Software that might be used in any
+subfield of medical care.  In other words it is a Debian
 Pure Blend covering medical and microbiological software.
 
-The \DebianMed project started in 2002 with a very small team but
-evolved over time to about 25 people working more or less actively in
-adding more and more relevant software to the package pool and caring
-for some general infrastructure inside Debian.  Ten of the Debian
-developers got this developer status only because the \DebianMed project
-existed.  In other words the subproject has a positive effect onto the
-Debian distribution as a whole because it attracts manpower.
+The \DebianMed project started in 2002 with a very small team but in the
+meantime has evolved to include about 25 participants, each working in
+various capacities to increase the pool of available, relevant medical
+software in the Debian repositories and maintain Debian's infrastructure
+specifically targeting at Debian Pure Blends needs, enabling efficient
+access to said resources.  Due to their involvement with the Debian Med
+project, ten contributors have become Debian developers.  Thus the
+Debian Med project serves to recruit talented new developers into the
+Debian fold.
 
 \DebianMed to some extend works as the missing link between the
 developers of Free Software in medicine (in Debian slang `upstream') and