[Publicity-commits] r3201 - /dpn/en/current/index.wml

jbr-guest at users.alioth.debian.org jbr-guest at users.alioth.debian.org
Sat Feb 18 11:49:47 UTC 2012


Author: jbr-guest
Date: Sat Feb 18 11:49:47 2012
New Revision: 3201

URL: http://anonscm.debian.org/viewvc/publicity/?sc=1&rev=3201
Log:
first sweep (part 1)

Modified:
    dpn/en/current/index.wml

Modified: dpn/en/current/index.wml
URL: http://anonscm.debian.org/viewvc/publicity/dpn/en/current/index.wml?rev=3201&op=diff
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--- dpn/en/current/index.wml (original)
+++ dpn/en/current/index.wml Sat Feb 18 11:49:47 2012
@@ -18,14 +18,13 @@
 <toc-add-entry name="EOLlenny">Goodbye Lenny!</toc-add-entry>
 
 <p>
-One year after the release of Debian 6.0 alias <q>Squeeze</q>
+One year after the release of Debian 6.0 alias <q>Squeeze</q>,
 and nearly three years after the release of Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 alias
-<q>Lenny</q> the security support for the old distribution (5.0 alias
-<q>Lenny</q>) <a href="$(HOME)/News/2012/20120209">is 
-terminated</a>. 
+<q>Lenny</q>, security support for the old <q>Lenny</q> release
+<a href="$(HOME)/News/2012/20120209">has been terminated</a>.
 The Debian project is proud to have been able to
-support its old distribution for such a long time and even for one year
-after a new version has been released.
+support its old distribution for such a long time, even continuing for
+a full year after the new version was released.
 </p>
 
 <toc-add-entry name="hurd">Debian GNU/Hurd on the rails</toc-add-entry>
@@ -33,7 +32,7 @@
 <p>
 Samuel Thibault sent some
 <a href="http://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2012/02/msg00002.html">bits from Debian GNU/Hurd porters</a>
-reporting recent achievements of the team. Among others news,
+reporting recent achievements of the team. Among other news items,
 Samuel confirmed that Debian GNU/Hurd might be available as a
 technological preview for the <q>Wheezy</q> release: the percentage of
 packages built for it has passed 70% and the installer is available




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